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Old 01-10-2015, 11:00 PM   #2
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Default Re: Aapki shikayat - shikha

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Originally Posted by Shikha sanghvi View Post

Vo andaz e sharmana bhi aapka tha,
Vo hole se muskurana bhi aapka tha.

Vo nigaho mai bas jana aapka tha,
Vo saanso mai bas jana bhi aapka tha.

Agar kuch nazar ka gunah tha,
To usme bhi saath aapka hi tha.

Hum chhod gaye aapka vo shaher,
To vo kasoor hum dono ka tha.

Aakhir karte bhi to kisse karte
Aapki shikayat E Sanam,

Vo shaher bhi aapka tha,
Or hume door jane dene ka
Vo niryan bhi aapka hi tha.

Shikha
शिखा जी, यह जल्दबाजी में पोस्ट की गई रचना है. बस इतना कहूँगा कि 'अंदाज़-ए-शरमाना' और 'आपकी शिकायत-ए-सनम' त्रुटिपूर्ण है. इनकी जगह सामान्य शब्द प्रयोग किये जा सकते थे. यदि ग़ज़ल के रूप में इसे प्रस्तुत करना है तो हर शे'र की दोनों पंक्तियों पर बराबर ध्यान देना चाहिए था. 'Vo niryan bhi aapka hi tha' पंक्ति को भी edit करें.
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