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Old 15-11-2012, 08:15 PM   #1
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कुछ पुरुष कॉलेजों में पढ़ते जब , आशिकाना मिजाज़ रखते हैं .
लड़कियों की नज़र में जंचने को , शातिराना मिजाज़ रखते हैं .

जाल में फंस गई अगर कोई , ख़ुब घुमाते हैं उसको बाइक पे ;
तान कॉलर बघारते शेखी , मालिक़ाना मिजाज़ रखते हैं .

लाख गड़ते हों सबकी नज़रों में , फ़र्क इनपे कोई नहीं पड़ता .
शर्म हो जिसमें , आँख मूंदे ख़ुद , बेहयाना मिजाज़ रखते हैं .

ताड़ कर और भी रईस बड़ा , फ़ुर्र हो जाये अगर माशूका ;
ज़ख्म के साथ याद जी करके , शायराना मिजाज़ रखते हैं .

हाल बेहाल देखकर इनका , घर बसाते जब इनका घर वाले ;
कुछ दिनों तक ये अपनी पत्नी पे , हुक्मराना मिजाज़ रखते हैं .

वक़्त के साथ झटक कर घूँघट , रंग असल जब वो दिखाने लगती .
देखकर रौद्र रूप पत्नी का , कायराना मिजाज़ रखते हैं .

इनके खुद के , पड़ोस के लड़के , जब इन्हीं हरकतों को दोहराते ;
ख़ुब पिलाते हैं नसीहत उनको , फलसफाना मिजाज़ रखते हैं .

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Old 15-11-2012, 09:59 PM   #2
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डॉ. श्रीवास्तव जी, इस ग़ज़ल में आपने पुरुष स्वभाव- विशेष रूप से मनचले नौजवानों के स्वभाव- का बड़ा मनोहारी दृष्य पेश किया है जिसमे गंभीरता भी है और चुटीलापन भी है, रचना मनोरंजक होने के साथ साथनसीहत भी देती है.
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इनके खुद के , पड़ोस के लड़के , जब इन्हीं हरकतों को दोहराते ;
ख़ुब पिलाते हैं नसीहत उनको , फलसफाना मिजाज़ रखते हैं .
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बहुत अच्छे राकेश जी ।
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