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Old 12-11-2012, 08:42 AM   #1
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किस क़ैद में जकड़ता जा रहा हूँ
मैं खुद से ही बिछड़ता जा रहा हूँ
जो ओझल हो गए आँखों से
उन ख्वाबों को पकड़ता जा रहा हूँ

दुनिया के सामने फ़ैलने की चाह में
कितना खुद में सिमटता जा रहा हूँ
मुठ्ठी भर ख़ुशी पर हक क्या जता दिया
दर्द से रिश्ता बनाता जा रहा हूँ

एक दिन तो फूल मिलेंगे राहों में
बस यूँ ही पत्थर हटाता जा रहा हूँ
तुम्हारा ये कहना कि आओगे लौटकर
साँसों से भी रिश्ता निभाता जा रहा हूँ
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Old 12-11-2012, 09:34 AM   #2
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भाव बहुत नाजुक चुने हैं आपने . कुल मिला के अच्छी रचना . महफ़िल में रौनक की उम्मीद जगाने हेतु आभार आपका अनिल कृति जी .
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Old 12-11-2012, 09:42 AM   #3
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बहुत सुंदर रचना अनिल जी।
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Old 12-11-2012, 09:48 AM   #4
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बहुत अच्छे अनिल जी
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बहुत खूबसूरत रचना है |
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खूबसूरत रचना..................
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Old 12-11-2012, 05:15 PM   #7
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बहुत सुदर .......
खुद से बीछुड़ता जा रहा हूँ .....
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[QUOTE=anilkriti;179747]
तुम्हारा ये कहना कि आओगे लौटकर
साँसों से भी रिश्ता निभाता जा रहा हूँ



अनिल कृति जी, आह से उपजी कविता अत्यन्त शक्तिशाली बन पड़ी है. उम्मीद की एक भी किरण दिल में बाकी हो तो सपने पूरे होने में विलम्ब नहीं होता. भावों का सम्प्रेषण श्रेष्ठ है. धन्यवाद.

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Old 14-11-2012, 12:29 AM   #9
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[QUOTE=rajnish manga;180786]
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Originally Posted by anilkriti View Post
तुम्हारा ये कहना कि आओगे लौटकर
साँसों से भी रिश्ता निभाता जा रहा हूँ



अनिल कृति जी, आह से उपजी कविता अत्यन्त शक्तिशाली बन पड़ी है. उम्मीद की एक भी किरण दिल में बाकी हो तो सपने पूरे होने में विलम्ब नहीं होता. भावों का सम्प्रेषण श्रेष्ठ है. धन्यवाद.
रजनीश जी बहुत धन्यवाद की आपको मेरा प्रयास पसंद आया /
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