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Old 23-01-2013, 08:36 PM   #1
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Default मेरा गम - संजीव

हमने उसे खुदा बनाया "संजीव" उसके
प्यार के लिए ,
और वो बोले खुदा कभी किसी एक
का नही हुआ
"संजीव"
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Old 23-01-2013, 10:51 PM   #2
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हमने उसे खुदा बनाया "संजीव" उसके
प्यार के लिए ,
और वो बोले खुदा कभी किसी एक
का नही हुआ
"संजीव"
आगाज़ तो बेहद इम्प्रेसिव है, माशाअल्लाह। लेकिन आगे भी तो आने दीजिए, जनाबे-आला। इस थ्रेड का मकसद तभी समझ में आएगा।
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Old 24-01-2013, 04:58 AM   #3
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हमने उसे खुदा बनाया "संजीव" उसके
प्यार के लिए ,
और वो बोले खुदा कभी किसी एक
का नही हुआ
"संजीव"
सही जा रहे हो ..........
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आगे की लाइन्स कहाँ हैं बंधू।
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Default Re: मेरा गम - संजीव

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हमने उसे खुदा बनाया "संजीव" उसके
प्यार के लिए ,
और वो बोले खुदा कभी किसी एक
का नही हुआ
"संजीव"


सुन्दर प्रयास है आपका.
एक शे'र मुलाहिजा करें संजीव जी:

दुनियां तेरे वजूद को करती रही तलाश
हमने तेरे ख़याल को यज़दां बना दिया

(यज़दां = खुदा)
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Old 24-01-2013, 09:17 PM   #6
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Default दो लाइन शायरी 'मेरा गम' -संजीव

एहसान नही जिंदगी तेरा मुझ पर,
मैने हर सांस की कीमत दी है यहां
"संजीव"
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बहुत बढ़िया संजीवजी। यह तो बानगी थी, कुछ और भी पेश करें, तभी पता चलेगा कि सूत्र कहां तक जाएगा।
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लिफाफा सौंप कर खो गया कहीं कासिद
कोरे कागज़ को पढने में मशगूल हैं हम।
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Default Re: दो लाइन शायरी 'मेरा गम' -संजीव

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एहसान नही जिंदगी तेरा मुझ पर,
मैने हर सांस की कीमत दी है यहां
"संजीव"
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Old 25-01-2013, 09:49 AM   #9
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Default मेरा गम शेयरी- संजीव

उडाओ न मजाक मेरा ऐसे दोस्तो,
कही मोहब्बत तुमे भी मुझसा पागल न करदे
"संजीव"
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Default Re: दो लाइन शायरी 'मेरा गम' -संजीव

यूँ न देख मेरे कब्र की तरफ,
तेरे आँखों में अश्क मुझसे देखे नहीं जाते....
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